Berube’s analogy of student essays and watching sports commentary on ESPN because students tend to summarize in their essay instead of analyzing it. Berube uses an example as to what he is trying to explain that in the world of sports metacommentary no one actually summarizes on how the game is being played instead they analyze, they just point out the important part of the game. He quotes “Well, Tony, let me point out last night, the Red Sox swept the Tigers and crept to within three games of the Yankees” then he quotes “…I’m just pointing out that Sox won 3-1, on a four hitter by Shilling, while the Yanks blew another late-inning lead”. Berube uses this comparison to explain that no one does that because no one in the sports world confuses summaries with analyses, meaning that he wants his students to use this as an example in how to write their essays. He discusses the importance of what a thesis should look like. “…When I tell them that an observation is not a thesis…” He wants students to write a paper in which the thesis can be arguable and to bring to the public’s attention, just as sports commentary do, pointing out the essential parts of the game. His response to student’s writing is to “Assume a hypothetical readership composed of people who have already read the book. That means that you shouldn’t say ‘In class, we discussed the importance of the clam chowder in Chapter Five.’ But more important it means you don’t have to summarize the novel …”
Berube most convincing analogy would be when he quoted the Red Sox won 3-1 with the Yankees. He gave two specific examples of what the difference of analyzing and summarizing. What he wants his papers look like. Well he uses the comparison with sports because what he wants his students to know that what he looks for is a paper that catches the public’s attention. He wants main points just as commentators argue about when a game is being played. His least convincing analogy was when he that’s sports walk was nothing but an entire entourage of chattering parasites. What did he really meant if this is what he is trying to compare with his student’s writing and sports. This is what sports metacommentary is suppose to be doing-argue about the game not just “chattering” like he says. I believe this paragraph he contradicted himself with the rest of the essay, because like he mentioned he wants his papers to be arguable just as sports talk should be. Berube says that sports talk analogy is useful simply as a handy way of distinguishing between summary and analysis. “When a student paper cites textual evidence so compelling and unusual that it makes me go back and read passage in a question (good!) …”he quotes and a “suggests that a novel conclusion fails to resolve the questions and tensions raised by the rest of the narrative or makes claim that are directly contradicted by the literary text its self (bad!)…” The significance of his point that “an observation is not a thesis means” because a thesis is usually an arguable piece of writing and in most cases factual and an observation is what is perceived by one at the moment meaning only you can base an opinion of what you just saw.